What do you think of my backstory? (LONG)

Post » Mon Mar 18, 2013 6:51 pm

Juntaz grew up in Sentinel and was the son of one of the most powerful, noble influential families in Hammerfell. His childhood was extremely privileged and from an early age his personal trainer, Ali (a legion veteran), taught him and his brother, Malik, the art of swordsmanship and the use of heavy armour. They both seemed to be very talented and were seen to excell at an extraordinairy pace in combat, and so at the ages of 13 and 14 were invited to join the Order of the Candle. An order their father was a member of for many years.

After spending 4 years in the order, both him and his brother were seen by the Order's elders not only to be extremely talented and intelligent, but also potential contenders for an elite branch of the Order that was assigned to be the personal "assistants" of King Lhotun. Once yet again, invited to join this elite branch they were out under five years of vigorous training by the best trainers in Tamriel in the arts of assassination, combat, speechcraft , espionage and protection. Once their training was complete, they were both members of the elite order of barely 40 members.

Malik's first assignment in the Order was to infiltrate Alino with 3 other members and attempt to assassinate members of the Elven council. They were all caught and executed. Once Juntaz heard the news he was overcome with grief. His brother who had been with him for all those years, was killed by a lowly elf. This ispired him. It fuelled him to take down the Dominion like nothing else could. He was sent on many missions. All of which were successful. His skill and efforts were once again noticed, but this time by King Lhotun himself. He was invited to become the King's personal bodyguard. Of course the term bodyguard was merely a title.

King Lhotun intended to use a warrior of his talents and his burning hatred of the Thalmor. Every Redguard that had been the King's bodyguard was really just an extremely elite royal knight/assasin/spy. The King sent him on many missions to the Isles to take out various members of the Thalmor and after killing countless Thalmor officials and causing a riot in the city of Dusk he was widely regarded by most of Tamriel to be the most skilled assasin and swordmaster that walked Tamriel.

In the meanwhile the King and the council were sculpting an elaborate plan to severely weaken the Dominion. He was to go in to Skyrim first and kill high ranking officials present in the province. Mainly though he was ordered to join the stormcloaks and help Skyrim become free of the empire. If the dominion did take Cyrodiil and Hammerfell was invaded again, at least the only other men on Tamriel would aid them. He was then to travel to the Summerset isles where he would destroy the Elven council themselves. He set off with three knights from the order of the candle.


They set off for Skyrim. They swapped their ornate and much preferred heavy armour for standard Alik'r clothing to not arouse suspicion and go under the front of sell swords from Hammerfell. This clothing made of silk (like all Redguard clothing) was much more comfortable that that stuff the Nords wore. He did though take his scimitar, Thalmor's bane. On the way in to Skyrim they were ambushed by an imperial arrow storm and he was the only one that survived. He was brought to Helgen and, what luck! Ulfric was there! After the dragon attacked and he escaped and went to Ulfric to join the Stormcloaks. Soon after on the way to Wildhelm he received a letter from Lhotun saying he was sorry about the Knights that died and once Skyrim was free, three more would be sent to meet him, where they would travel to the isles.


(Completes ST questline)

After the Stormcloaks were victorious he awaited the three knights from the order. He then received another letter from Lhotun, saying that the knights would arrive within a few months due to some complications. In the meanwhile he could "relax" as he put it and wait for the Knights of the order before they set off on the most daring mission in the history of Tamriel. He then saw Jorvaskkr and thought, what's that?


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Allison C
 
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Post » Tue Mar 19, 2013 1:51 am

I didn't read it as I am on my phone. Is this going to be a continuing story? If so, you may want to look to the Artwork and Fan Fiction forum. If not, I'll read it later when I'm on my computer.
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Laura Tempel
 
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Post » Mon Mar 18, 2013 2:01 pm

I didn't read it as I am on my phone. Is this going to be a continuing story? If so, you may want to look to the Artwork and Fan Fiction forum. If not, I'll read it later when I'm on my computer.

I would also like to know if this would be ongoing. It's almost funny to read about a person who thinks he can destroy the Dominion. Too bad my character is too strong for your Juntaz to assassinate, as he would be ripped apart by angry Dremoras in seconds. The Dominion can never be weakened enough to the point of collapse while Osgumund (my character) lives.
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Post » Mon Mar 18, 2013 7:44 pm



I would also like to know if this would be ongoing. It's almost funny to read about a person who thinks he can destroy the Dominion. Too bad my character is too strong for your Juntaz to assassinate, as he would be ripped apart by angry Dremoras in seconds. The Dominion can never be weakened enough to the point of collapse while Osgumund (my character) lives.
While we're on the topic of your character, you submitted a character for a RP thread earlier. Some of us gave some feedback if you want to check that out.

On topic: I already gave you my thoughts..
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Post » Tue Mar 19, 2013 12:26 am

While we're on the topic of your character, you submitted a character for a RP thread earlier. Some of us gave some feedback if you want to check that out.

On topic: I already gave you my thoughts..

Which character do you mean? The Redguard one or the Dunmer one? I have a lot going right now...
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Post » Mon Mar 18, 2013 5:24 pm



Which character do you mean? The Redguard one or the Dunmer one? I have a lot going right now...
No. I think he is Altmer. Go to the Recovery of the Ten. Maybe you aren't the one who put that up though. If so, sorry for the mistake.
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Post » Mon Mar 18, 2013 6:49 pm

No. I think he is Altmer. Go to the Recovery of the Ten. Maybe you aren't the one who put that up though. If so, sorry for the mistake.

Thanks for telling me, I didn't want to not have responded/edited before Pompous Altmer or someone else decided to veto me.
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Post » Mon Mar 18, 2013 9:27 pm

That's nice. The only thing that would have bothered me would be that I was so weak coming out of helgen, and I was considered incredibly powerful in the story.
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